Choosing between Active and Passive Voice Verbs when Writing

 

Usually, effective writing uses the active voice and shuns the passive. Nevertheless, some situations are awkward or inappropriate when expressed in the active voice. Certainly, these situations call for the passive voice.

 

Reasons to use the passive voice:

  •  The agent (doer) of the action is unimportant.
  • The pyramids were built thousands of years ago.
    • The agent is unknown.
  • Several robberies were committed during the night.
    • The agent is common knowledge, and mentioning it would be redundant.
  • George Bush was elected in 2000.
    • The writer desires to control focus of sentence.

      1) to de-emphasize the agent’s role in the action

      • The alarm was triggered by my son. [Passive construction shifts focus away from the son’s responsibility.]

      2) to emphasize the party receiving the action

    • Jack was kicked by Jill.

     

    Reasons to use the active voice:

    •  The active voice is shorter and more direct.
  • Compare.

    Active: The waiter dropped the tray of food.
    Passive: The tray of food was dropped by the waiter.

    • The active voice is less awkward and clearly states relationship between subject and action.
  • Compare.

    Passive: Your request for funding has been denied by the review committee.
    Active: The review committee denied your request for funding.

    • The active voice sentence pattern propels the reader forward through your writing thus avoiding weak prose.

     

    Used with permission from Oregon State University Business Writing web page by Donna Shaw www.orst.edu

     

    Identifying Passive Voice Verbs AR 1/21/02

    Verbs have two voices: active and passive.

    In active voice sentences, the verb expresses the action in the sentence, the subject performs the action, and the object is the recipient of the action. Active sentences follow the pattern: subject-verb-object.

    Jill kicked Jack.

    In a passive voice sentence, the subject and object flip-flop. The subject becomes the passive recipient of the action.

    Jack was kicked by Jill.

    Form of Passive Voice Verbs

    The passive voice requires a "double verb" and will always consist of a form of the verb "to be" and the past participle (usually the "en/ed/t" form) of another verb. Example: is kicked

    Writers should be familiar with the forms of "to be" so that they can easily identify the passive voice in their work.

    Review the forms of "to be": am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been

    Note the forms of "to be" in the examples of the verb "to kick" in various forms of the passive voice:

    is kicked----------------had been kicked
    was kicked-------------is going to be kicked
    is being kicked---------will be kicked
    has been kicked-------can be kicked
    was being kicked------should be kicked

    Often passive voice sentences will contain a "by" phrase indicting who or what performed the action. Passive sentences can be easily transformed into active sentences when the object of the preposition "by" is moved to the subject position in the sentence.

    Passive: The cookies were eaten by the children.
    Active: The children ate the cookies.

    Passive: The tunnels are dug by the gophers.
    Active: The gophers dug the tunnels.

     

    Level 1: Directions: Change the sentences below to the passive voice.

    1. Children cannot open these bottles easily.
    2. The government built a road right outside her front door.
    3. Mr. Ross broke the antique vase as he walked through the store.
    4. When she arrived, the changes amazed her.
    5. The construction workers are making street repairs all month long.
    6. The party will celebrate his retirement.
    7. His professors were discussing his oral exam right in front of him.
    8. My son ate all the homemade cookies.
    9. Corrosion had damaged the hull of the ship.
    10. Some children were visiting the old homestead while I was there.

     

    Directions: Change the sentences below to the active voice.

    1. The statue is being visited by hundreds of tourists every year.
    2. My books were stolen by someone yesterday.
    3. These books had been left in the classroom by a careless student.
    4. Coffee is raised in many parts of Hawaii by plantation workers.
    5. The house had been broken into by someone while the owners were on vacation.
    6. A woman was being carried downstairs by a very strong firefighter.
    7. The streets around the fire had been blocked off by the police.
    8. Have you seen the new movie that was directed by Ron Howard?
    9. My car is in the garage being fixed by a dubious mechanic.
    10. A great deal of our oil will have been exported to other countries by our government.

     

    Used with permission from Oregon State University Business Writing web page by Donna Shaw www.orst.edu

     

    Level 2 Revision Practice: Avoiding Passive Voice Verbs

    Read this essay carefully paying special attention to passive voice verbs. Revise the essay by changing the passive verbs into active verbs where appropriate.

    Mistakes
    1. Technological civilization has reached its
    2. present "advanced" state by the trial-and-error behavior of
    3. those who lived before us. Many of the most useful
    4. discoveries and inventions were the result of mistakes when
    5. people were looking for something else. The New World was
    6. found by Columbus, who was really looking for India. The
    7. discovery of penicillin was speeded by somebody who left a
    8. loaf of bread out to get moldy. Think how far behind
    9. ourselves we’d be now if mistakes were impossible for us to
    10. make.
    11. Our knowledge is also increased by our mistakes, if
    12. only because once a mistake has been made, a way of
    13. correcting it must be found. If the mistake had not been
    14. made by us in the first place, we might have had no reason
    15. to learn how things are done. As I wrote the first version
    16. of this essay, I made a few minor errors. As a result of my
    17. mistakes, since I did discover them, I learned the
    18. difference between continuous and continual; I learned that
    19. useful has only one l (and that the rule goes for hundreds
    20. of other words, like wasteful, harmful, spoonful); and I
    21. learned how to use a semicolon when a comma won’t do.
    22. Had I made no mistakes in the first place, I might
    23. have had a pretty good essay, but I would still not have
    24. known why.
    25. Of course, mistakes have to be recognized for what they
    26. are. If Columbus had thought San Salvador was India and let
    27. things go at that, the world would be smaller today. Had
    28. the moldy bread been tossed to the birds, the birds might
    29. have become healthy while human life went on suffering from
    30. raging diseases. (I realize these statements are somewhat
    31. doubtful, but now I’m so curious about Columbus and
    32. penicillin that I’m going to learn the real facts
    33. tomorrow.)
    34. Mistakes are made by computers, but only rarely by
    35. comparison with the human brain’s continual bumbling. Human
    36. beings, one might say, have emotions and desires and
    37. prejudices that mistakes are the result of. Those quirks,
    38. are not things that computers have. Distractions,
    39. and fatigue are suffered by human beings but not by
    40. computers. So it is possible to say that we are in a bit of
    41. danger. If the time should ever come when most of the
    42. world’s work is done by computers rather than by people,
    43. fewer mistakes will be made. And fewer mistakes will mean
    44. fewer of those useful discoveries and inventions brought
    45. about by the stumblings of the human species.

     

    Adapted from Readable Writing: Revising for Style by H. Wendell Smith p 112-114.

     

    Answers for Level 2 Revision Practice: Avoiding Passive Voice Verbs

    You should have used the active voice to replace passive in lines 5-6, 7-8, 11, 12, 1, 25, 34, 37, 39, and 42-43. Remember an occasional passive-voice sentence, if not awkward, may be appropriate.

     

    Note Style: Ten Lessons in Clarity & Grace by Joseph M. Williams contains a really nice discussion of passive voice and exercises (pp. 72-83). The book is located in the style section of the Writing Center library.

     

     

    Level 3: Working with Passive Voice Constructions

     

    Directions: Identify and eliminate the passive constructions in the sentences below.

    1. The particular topic chosen by the instructor for study in his section of English 2 must be approved by the Steering Committee. [Hint: Start with "The Steering Committee."]
    2. Recommendations concerning the type of study needed to assure adequate definition of the larger problem and develop feasible options in programs designed to eliminate or greatly reduce both the direct and indirect effects within a reasonable time and at acceptable cost were presented in the report. [Begin with "The report."]
    3. Avoidance of such blunders should not be considered a virtue for which the student is to be commended, any more than he would be praised for not wiping his hands on the tablecloth or polishing his shoes with guest towels. [Hint: Begin with "We should not."]
    4. Collaborative analytical determinations were utilized to assess the probable consequences of mechanical failure. [Start with "Analysts."]
    5. The difference between restrictives and nonrestrictives can also be better approached through a study of the different contours that mark the utterance of the two kinds of element than through confusing attempts to differentiate the two by meaning. ["One can."]
    6. Individuals whose income is insufficient to lift them above poverty must be provided with assistance from public sources. [Start active, and try "Supplement."]
    7. In the next thirty-five years it is expected that there will be more engineering work to be done than has been done in all of recorded history.[Make "The next thirty-five years" the subject.]
    8. If expansion is not accomplished, then two less-efficient alternatives must be acted upon: either the book sales will have to be in separate quarters or else the whole enterprise will have to be moved to a new location. [Try "we."]
    9. Trees on average sites are expected to be about twenty inches in diameter when they are eighty years old if they are managed properly since youth. [Start "Managed properly."]
    10. Any amended declaration should be filed with the Internal Revenue Office with whom the original declaration was filed even if you move to another district.

     

    From The Complete Stylist and Handbook by Sheridan Baker (p.181-182)

     

     

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